Wednesday, June 9, 2010

Lunar Eclipse Chapter 4 Jasper's POV

My thoughts on this chapter: Jasper has been the most challenging to write. Much like Jasper, I was at war with myself when I wrote it. Unsure, if it gave off the right picture of Jasper.

There were many parts of this chapter that I could have chosen. However, Jasper asking an unconscious Bella for forgiveness. Has a strong pull to it.

Chapter 4: Penance

I, Jasper Cullen, on the other hand blamed no one but myself.

I was aware of the risk of Bella being a part of our lives. Just like so many of my family, I was willing to look the other way when I saw the spark of life that Bella ignited deep within my brother. Once Edward had decided to turn from the path of ending her life, I began to feel emotion roll from him that I never had before. The simple feeling of his happiness made me joyful.

But now Edward's joy lay battered and broken before me. Bella's body portrayed Edward's emotions perfectly. Even though leaving Bella had been his choice, leaving her had broken him and had thrown him into a darkness I had never experienced before. Edward's very being seemed to have withered and died; much like the prairie grass in the hot Texas sun.

Turning my thoughts back toward my task, I took in a deep breath.

"I'd like to ask you to forgive me for what I did that night. Not just for my actions, but for the consequences of those actions. I tore away your reason to live. I didn't see it before, but I do now. You complete him, Bella. I see now that it was you who pulled him from the darkness."

I couldn't seem to pull my eyes away from her ashen-colored face. Carlisle had sewn the gash on her forehead closed while butterfly band aids pulled closed some of the lesser cuts on her face. A large purple and black bruise lay cross her right cheek; it seemed to blend with the dark circles under her eyes.

An IV line twined out from the bend in her right elbow. Staring at the IV line was how I noticed the long thin scar that ran from her wrist to her elbow. There was one more scar on her that I had yet to look at. It was the crescent shaped one on her hand. James had branded her that day, stealing something precious from my brother.



Monday, June 7, 2010

Lunar Eclipse Chapter 3 Edward's POV

Chapter 3: Mirrored Self

My Feelings toward this chapter: This chapter was one of my favorites to right, because I got to get inside of Edward's head. I love being in Carlisle head as well. It was however a very intense chapter for me to write. It was written during a very emotional time for me. Sept. 26th 2009 I lost my dog to a group of wild dogs. Then on Oct. 4th 2009 my uncle died. Then at the end of the month of Oct. I lost a childhood friend to a hunting accident. So I had a very in depth feel on how Edward would feel being away from Bella, filling in that blank. Though I cried while writing this it happy me to grieve.

Playlist fact: Haunted by Evanescence, Shadows by Red and Take It All Away by Red were the songs I listened to. I listened to Red a lot that month and in November.

Edward POV

"You've tasted companionship; it's not so easily thrown away."

Shaking the sound of my own voice from my head, I started toward the door. I needed to hunt before I lost my mind. I then caught a whisper of a voice on the wind. It was a voice I knew well, one I could never forget. The sound of the soft voice made me freeze.

"I love you Edward. Forgive me."

"Bella?"

I turned toward the sound of her voice. I'm not sure why I did it. What did I expect to find?

What I saw caused my mouth to feel like a desert. She was here! Somehow she had found me.

I took two steps toward her, only to realize Bella wasn't solid; she was transparent, ghost-like. My heart ached as large fissures erupted over the surface of my still heart. She wasn't real. The image before me was no different than the one, of myself that had spoken to me mere seconds ago. This was not the girl I had left behind, she looked lost and broken Anger at myself for hoping she was real came first. It was then replaced by the broken and empty feeling from before.

Breathing was becoming more difficult causing me to stop altogether. It was two seconds later when I realized that I was crying.

Turning my back on the fading image of my fragile little human, I sped out the door. I had to find my sanity again – I needed to hunt. Yet every time I had my prey within my sight and grasp, I would hear her soft voice whisper in the wind.

'Edward, I love you. Come back to me.'

Shaking the remains of her voice from my head, I tried again to focus on the hunt. As I stopped inside the clearing I could hear the pounding of their hearts. Venom flooded my mouth at the thought of tasting their blood on my lips. Closing my eyes I focused on finding the strongest heart beat. I needed a challenge and I was hoping that I could find it in one of the deer.

My eyes snapped open once I found the strong thumping heart I was looking for. At first I had thought that my prey was male, and then as I drew closer, I realized that it was a doe. There was no masking the fear that was causing her heart to pound wildly in her chest. She knew she was being hunted and was fleeing for her life. As I started to close in on the doe, my movement barely caused a leaf to flutter to the ground. I was running beside her seconds later, before I lunged and took her in my arms. The deer's coat was soft and buttery in my cold hands. One flick of a finger was all I needed to end its life and steal its life's blood from its body. Out of the corner of my eye I caught the reflection of something familiar in its deep brown eyes.

'Edward, forgive me. I'll never leave you. I'm yours forever.'

I loved all of this chapter, but this is by far my favorite excerpt.

Friday, June 4, 2010

Lunar Eclipse Chapter 2: Alice POV


A half mile from the bridge, Carlisle stopped the car. We all knew we had a much better chance of reaching Bella quicker if we went the rest of the way on foot. Thanks to the late hour, as well as the heavy down pour, there were no other cars on the road. We ran with inhuman speed toward the bridge even as sheets of water continued to fall and snap against my hard skin. Before me I could make out the mangled guard rail cables. I also picked up on the scent of wet sweet grass, vanilla and wet leather. Jasper had some how made it to the bridge ahead of us.
His wild curly blond hair was now plastered to his head. He looked in our direction for what was less then a second. I could see that his eyes were the richest color of butterscotch I had ever seen them. The sight of their brightness made me think of Edward and all the precautions he took when he was around Bella.
"Jasper, wait!"
My pleas did little to stop his momentum even though I knew that he had heard me, he paid no heed to my cries. Jasper disappeared from the bridge and I knew he had jumped into the black water below, after Bella's sinking car. I didn't even realize that I had frozen in place until I heard the sound of Carlisle's voice.
"Alice! Alice, get moving! Bella needs all of us. Jasper will need you as well."
There was a loud smacking sound as we hit the water. Emmett moved toward Jasper's side. I think Emmett's decision had to do with the fact that he was unsure if it was safe for Jasper to be so close to Bella. They both dove under the water with Carlisle and I following close behind.
Emmett ripped open the driver's side door, while Jasper quickly freed an unconscious Bella from her seat belt. With Bella in his arms Jasper quickly headed toward the surface. Emmett, Carlisle and I were very close behind him. Oh, how I wished I knew what was going on in Jazz's head.
"Oh, Edward, why did you have to leave?"
Once we reached the surface, Jasper sprang from the water, heading for the embankment before jumping up and landing on the bridge. He was clutching Bella to him when we landed beside him. I couldn't read his mind, but I had seen the course he had chosen. Jasper was determined not to let anymore harm come to Bella.
My input on this Chapter:
We all know how much Alice cares about Bella. I wrote this chapter to show that Alice didn't have to do as Edward asked. Good thing too, Bella has a knack for getting into trouble.
Jasper saves the day. What better way for Jasper to redeem himself then to save Bella. I struggled a little bit with this chapter, before I decided it was the right thing to do. I had quite a few reviewer happy with my decision to have Jasper rescue Bella. For that I'm very happy.

Thursday, June 3, 2010

Lunar Eclipse Ch. 1 Bella's & Alice's POV


Summary: Edward leaves Bella alone in the woods after telling her he didn't want her any more. As she is lying on the cold forest floor; Bella remembers three important things. Edward made a promise not to leave her, and Edward never broke a promise, and third it was her body, her heart, what right did he have to decide what was good for her? All in all Bella realizes that Edward was covering up his true feeling about her. All in all Bella goes to bring Edward home.

Why I wrote Lunar Eclipse: Just for some of you that may stumble across this blog I was working on three other stories when this story idea came to me and wouldn't go away. I will talk about them later. Like so many others out there I was unhappy with the way that Bella just accepted Edward's about him never loving her. So She goes after him to get him back.

Where is is posted: Lunar Eclipse can be found at Fanfiction.net, Twilighted.net(chs.1-9) and MyVampireFiction (chs.1-6)

Chapter 1: Dark Abyss

"I'm going to be fine, Dad." How sure I was about my words I didn't know.


Charlie turned and headed toward the door. He paused as he turned the knob, letting a sigh escape his lips, "Well, alright, but that doesn't mean you're not going. Goodnight Bells."

Turning away from the door, I wanted nothing more than to throw myself into bed and pray that I would die before morning. But even in despair, I couldn't escape my clumsiness as I stubbed my big toe on one of the floor boards. I fell to the floor to grab my toe. While I stifled a cry and a barrage of curse words, I looked for the offender. The floor board was lifted up, how had I not noticed it before?


Curiosity over why the board was even popped up had me getting down on my knees. So I set out to try and pull the board up. It took me six tries before it suddenly popped out of place sending me tumbling backwards.


What I saw beneath the board stole my breath from me. There tucked away, but not gone, were the plane tickets Carlisle and Esme had bought me for my birthday. Along with every photo I had of Edward and the rest of the Cullens. Then, overjoyed, I saw the most precious gift I had ever received: the CD he had made me.


How had they gotten there? It was then I remembered Edward's words:
"It will be like I was never here."


Edward had done this; he had hidden everything, thinking that without the tangible proof of his existence, I would move on. How foolishly simple minded of him. Did he really think that just because I was human it would be that easy? I felt the hole in my chest pull as if it where widening more. It was agonizing to realize he had thought it would be so simple.


After pulling everything out of Edward's hiding place, I noticed a square blue velvet box. I didn't remember this being one of my gifts. With trembling fingers, I weakly pulled the box open. Inside was a large sterling silver heart on a delicate chain with the words Edward Cullen & Bella Swan We Are One engraved on it.

This is my favorite piece from this chapter. Tomorrow I will share a little bit of Chapter Two: The Sky won't Fall Forever with you.

Lunar Eclipse